大家进来讨论下开发信怎么写?

sunnysky16 · 发表于 2007-11-26 09:25:00

做外贸几个月了, 开发信发了不少,回信的却了了无几.... 集思广益.欢迎广大朋友讨论, 看开发信怎么写更具吸引力....下面是我的开发信.....
Dear sir /madam ,
We come to know your name and address of your firm through the
internet. We notice that you are a big  company in your country .
We take this opportunity to introduce ourselves Guangzhou Sanyang
Electron Technology Co.,Ltd . as one of the manufactures in the line
of computer power supply and pc case in china for many years.which
have a good quality and reasonable price, So far, our company has a
10.000 sqm production plant, with more than 400 skilled workers. Most
of our products passed CE,CCC certification , we want to take this
opportunity to approach you for the establishment of business relationship.
Should you find interest in our items, kindly let me know. We shall be
pleased to give you our lowest quotations upon receipt of your
detailed requirements.
Yours truly,
sunny

xywwxc · 发表于 2007-11-26 09:25:00

我觉得题目很重要 !!!!!!!!~`````

sunnysky16 · 发表于 2007-11-26 09:28:00

楼上的题目有何经验呢? 我一般写公司产品computer power supply 或者 hello , how
are you ?

jack_sun0707 · 发表于 2007-11-26 09:39:00

computer power manufacturer
Jack sun
E-mail.jack_sun0707@sina.com
Msn:jack_sun0707@sina.com
重庆航天巴山摩托车制造有限公司
专业生产两轮摩托车，沙滩车，三轮车

slinda · 发表于 2007-11-26 10:30:00

最好不要写how are you?
写the pricelist of goods.

tomrrrr · 发表于 2007-11-26 10:50:00

同学们想一想，
你们还在这儿讨论开发信件应该怎么写，怎么改。有没有用呢？
或许人家连看都不看一眼，或许直接就被系统给退回来了。。
只不过还是那句老话：‘有枣没枣打一竿子’

maria-wangxiao · 发表于 2007-11-26 10:58:00

开发信最好要简明扼要采购商大都不愿看太冗繁的邮件

梦竹小丫 · 发表于 2007-11-26 11:02:00

内容太板了不好，一看就象群发信

dolinna · 发表于 2007-11-26 11:06:00

内容太多了
密密麻麻的

nballright · 发表于 2007-11-26 11:10:00

这个是我其中的一种开发信,供大家参考!
Dear  Mr.RIAD JAWISH,
   RE:Your possible order for" LOCKS,HANDLE,HINGES,FITTING,SANITARY WARE,PIPES"
   I am pleased to obtain your esteemed name through world importers net, we are the member of  it  too.and learn that you are interested in LOCKS,HANDLE,HINGES,FITTING,SANITARY WARE,PIPES which are coincides with our business activities.
   I am so pleasure to take this opportunity to introduce our company& our products to you.  this company specialises in all kinds of locks,handles etc. and we enjoy high prestige for our products' high quality and competitive price in the world market.
   We appreciate your kind attention, and look forward to establishing a long-term & mutual beneficial partnership with you in the near future.
   If you have any inquiry, we will be glad to provide further details upon request.you can contact me by MSN:nballright@hotmail.com & Email:nballright@nbhaifeng.com;nballright@gmail.com
   Enclosed is our company's catalog of locks,handles,hardware Fittings.please take it easy to open it  because I have checked it by virus-killer software(the latest version) before sending you.
   Finally,I would like to know which kind of locks,handles,hardware fittings are you most interested in?
   B.regards
   Yours faithfully

vera_sbz · 发表于 2007-11-26 11:14:00

谢谢大家，收下了。。很好喔

tedasunny · 发表于 2007-11-26 11:42:00

大家都写得不错嘛,不过我真的英语水平太差了,想写好都不行呀

sunnysky16 · 发表于 2007-11-26 11:52:00

7楼开发信最好要简明扼要  采购商大都不愿看太冗繁的邮件
有同感...谁有简明的开发信?  还有第一次要不要直接发the pricelist 过去呢?

maggie_rang · 发表于 2007-11-26 12:19:00

以下是我的开发信，请各位批评指正。怎么修改会更吸引人一些呢？
Dear Mr.Yves Sfeir，
How are you, and hope you have a nice day.
Having had your name from Internet, we avail ourselves of this opportunity to write to you and see if we can establish business relations with you.
Our company (----) specializes in manufacturing various kinds of stainless steel valves, stainless steel pipe fittings, stainless steel seamless tubes, stainless steel welded tubes.
All products are manufactured according to the Chinese standard GB code, the US standard API/ASTM code, the British standard BS code, the Japanese standard JIS code, the Russia standard ΓOCT code, the French standard NF code and the Germany standard DIN code and so forth.
Moreover, our company has the authentication of the ISO9001:2000 international quality certification and the NQA certification, API-6D USA quality control, Russia Market Permit Certificate and so on. The organization has registered its enterprise symbol JHS and J as the International Registrated trade marks. The products are exported to more than 50 countries and areas.
We will offer the hight quality product with best price. If you are interested in our product, feel free contact us. Quotations will follow upon receipt of your specific enquiry.
We look forward to hearing from you soon.
More information will be found in www.----.com .

With regards,

小夜曲 · 发表于 2007-11-26 12:54:00

都好长啊
听说一般是简洁点好
这个应该没什么统一标准的吧
运气成分太大了
哎

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