请高人精简开发信[修改]

shenqin5870 · 发表于 2008-8-5 08:55:00

请高人精简开发信
请高人精简开发信，要点一定要有，谢谢
Dear Sir,
We get to know that you presently require the toys from china, do you still need it?
Shanghai Run Gu Arts and Crafts Co., Ltd. is a professional manufacturer of plush stuffed toys, crafts and gifts. Our main products include plush stuffed toys, Christmas gifts, and Valentine’s Day gifts, hanging decorations, pillows and cushions. Our products are popular in Europe, America, Japan and Korea.
Our company has more than 20 years' experience in plush toys industry. Our company complies with EN-71 EC Standards and US ASTM F963-07 Standards. We can offer good quality products with competitive prices. Our company’s production capacity is 300,000 pieces per month. Please visit our website *********..com to get more information and products detail.
We are looking forward to your specific inquiries.
[ 本帖最后由 tinalijing 于 2008-8-5 10:06 编辑 ]

jiaodoushi911 · 发表于 2008-8-6 09:57:00

Dear Sir,
We get to know that you presently require the toys from china, do you still need it?
Shanghai Run Gu Arts and Crafts Co., Ltd. a professional manufacturer, specialized in  plush stuffed toys, Christmas gifts, and Valentine’s Day gifts, hanging decorations, pillows and cushions, which are popular in Europe, America, Japan and Korea.
In a leading position in plush toys industry, our company has more than 20 years' experience and a  production capacity of 300,000 pieces per month, whose products complie with EN-71 EC Standards and US ASTM F963-07 Standards.
We can offer top quality products with competitive prices. Please visit our website *********..com to get more information and products detail.
We are looking forward to your specific inquiries.
改了下句式结构，稍微少了些，FYI

贾艳 · 发表于 2008-8-6 10:27:00

my suggestion as following:
offer the details of your company:
company name
company address
what are you in line?
tel:
fax:
e-mail:
attn:
website
then the customer will visit your website
and they will contact with you if they found the products what are they looking for?
they don't like spending so much time to read

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