请高人精简开发信

shenqin5870

请高人精简开发信，要点一定要有，谢谢
Dear Sir,

We get to know that you presently require the toys from china, do you still need it?

Shanghai Run Gu Arts and Crafts Co., Ltd. is a professional manufacturer of plush stuffed toys, crafts and gifts. Our main products include plush stuffed toys, Christmas gifts, and Valentine’s Day gifts, hanging decorations, pillows and cushions. Our products are popular in Europe, America, Japan and Korea.
Our company has more than 20 years' experience in plush toys industry. Our company complies with EN-71 EC Standards and US ASTM F963-07 Standards. We can offer good quality products with competitive prices. Our company’s production capacity is 300,000 pieces per month. Please visit our website http://rungu.en.alibaba.com to get more information and products detail.
We are looking forward to your specific inquiries.
        

bscgarden

LZ的文章写的太详细,但是我觉得要是我的话不会看下去的,太多了!!!!
        

bscgarden

Dear Sir,
Shanghai Run Gu Arts and Crafts Co., Ltd. is a professional manufacturer of plush stuffed toys, crafts and gifts.
Our main products as following:
plush stuffed toys, Christmas gifts, Valentine’s Day gifts, hanging decorations, pillows, cushions.
Our company complies with EN-71 EC Standards and US ASTM F963-07 Standards.
Please visit our website http://rungu.en.alibaba.com to get more information and products detail.
We are looking forward to your specific inquiries.
这个是我的建议, 以交流为目的.
        

erbin

关注中....占个位子....
        

阿哲

到目前位置还没发过开发信， 不发表意见。
        

被窝有你

都太长了，
hello,
we are exporter of ... we want to make business relations with your company,
and we welcome your enquiry at any time.
best regards
..
        

lihe870119

QUOTE:原帖由 被窝有你 于 2008-8-5 10:59 发表


都太长了，
hello,
we are exporter of ... we want to make business relations with your company,
and we welcome your enquiry at any time.
best regards
..
不错不错。学习了。
我的想法：
Hi,hardware,buy or not ?
tks &rgds

        

happypiggy

最好不要用 SIR啊 直接说 我们是XX生产商 要的话 联系
        

lihe870119

我们经常用Dear Sir,请问有没有更好的方法？
        

samwang

我一般用HI THERE...
我觉得可以写的详细些. 我一直觉得广告是打给有需要的人的.. 所以写详细点没问题的.这样能帮你摔选出真正有意向的人..
不过觉得没写出你们公司的什么优势.. 很一般的推荐信.. 是我看了也觉得平淡..
个人理解..
        

广州老敏

学习一下，虽然不直接做外贸
        

raymon426

秋水皎皎如明月，长天浩浩似我心。
        

hong133

一楼写的太罗嗦了.要言简意垓.
把废话去掉,就很好了。